Days seemed to have passed since they’d arrived in town. For some reason, however, Mike couldn’t recall its name.
“What’s the
name of this town again, Dave?” he asked his brother. The frog tattoo on Dave’s
right hand shifted in and out of sight as he swung the oars opposite Mike. The
fog was incredibly thick. Had he not known his brother was with him in the
boat, Mike would have thought he was all alone in the middle of the lake. All
he could hear was the creaking of the boat. His brother remained silent. “The
pier’s pretty far away now. Where are we going?”
Dave
remained silent. The silence was almost deafening. Suddenly, the rowing
stopped.
“Dave?”
Mike leaned forward to catch a glimpse of his brother’s face. The fog engulfed
his face like a cold blanket. He saw the oars abandoned, the seat empty. Dave
was gone. Mike’s heart sank. He started frantically looking around the boat,
shouting for help. Everything was silent. But then he heard it. Static. It came
from the portable radio Dave had brought with him. Mike picked it up and tried
to fix the static somehow, but it only got louder.
And then,
in an instant, he heard nothing again, as a huge force pushed him out of the
boat, head-first into the lake. He could hear a loud pounding coming from
within his skull, but did his best to remain lucid. The surface was further and
further away. He tried to swim upwards, he couldn’t die in a place like this,
but he wasn’t getting any closer to the surface. Something was pulling him
down. He looked at his feet, the black abyss of the lake was overwhelming, but
he thought he could make out a pale shape around his foot. As his eyes got used
to the darkness, the shape became clearer. Mike let out a scream, inaudible in
the lake’s cold depths. When the hand around his foot finally let go, his
lifeless body sunk lower and lower into the black abyss, passing by the hand
with the frog tattoo.
Great story! You managed to make it suspenseful and interesting in a few short paragraphs!
ReplyDeleteFat chance for a sequel, huh? :o) Though if you take Cain and Abel...
ReplyDeleteTRAFNIE TO NAPISAŁEŚ...Cain and Abel..dokładnie tak..fantastyczne...krótka historia...ale jak trzyma w napięciu.....I zakończenie...
DeleteStill, I don't see any brother killing another here ;)
DeleteShore knot. Tis only file. :)
DeleteSo they're both dead, huh?
ReplyDeletePretty much.
DeleteYeah, I just got the impression that some people didn't really figure that out on spot. All it takes is a careful read through, though. :)
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